The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
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The provided line graph demonstrates the
quantity
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number
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of people, who took part in film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances at a particular social
accomodation
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accommodation
in Melbourne, Australia in the
years
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2000 to 2020.
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, one can notice that there were no drastic
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in the
number
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of
contestans
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contestants
contestant
for most of the activities, except table tennis and amateur dramatics. It is
readly
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readily
really
apparent, that
film
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the film
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club had the most participants throughout the
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with
a slight changes
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slight changes
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from 60 to 65. Martial arts had a stable
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of contestants in the period from 2000 to 2020 as well. It started off with 36 participants in the year
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2000 and had irrelevant drops and raises from 32 to 38,
subsequently
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. The
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of participants
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in
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amateur dramatics was around 26 in 2000 and increased to 28 by 2005. In the following
years
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, the amount of people participating in the activity began falling, and in the year 2020 reached the lowest
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for all the activities, being equal to 7. In
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, the
number
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of contestants
for
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in
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table tennis was stable before 2010 and in the following
years
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rose to the rate of 38 and 53,
subsequently
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. Musical performances started off in 2005
amd
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and
in the following
years
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the
number
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of contestants rose steadily to the rate of 28 in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "subsequently".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • social centre
  • comparison
  • trends
  • consistently popular
  • gained popularity
  • lost popularity
  • community interest
  • availability of facilities
  • social factors
  • economic factors
  • external events
  • economic downturns
  • health crises
  • demographic changes
  • aging population
  • marketing
  • community outreach programs
  • participation rates
  • Melbourne
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