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Band 4.5

In recent years, farming practice has changed to include methods such as factory farming and the use of technology to improve crops. Some people believe these developments are while others regard them as dangerous and advocate a return to more traditional farming methods. Discuss both the points of view and give your opinion.

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In the modern era
that
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the farming
mehod
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method
methods
 has changed,
people
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 are using new
thechnical
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technical
 elements for farming
such
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 as industrial farming .
While
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 some of them argued that modern farming
it
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can be
harming
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harmful
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 for the
crpos
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crops
 and we should
use
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 traditional farming methods.
This
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 essay will explain
the
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both
of
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views because new
thechnical
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technical
 farming is
need
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needed
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of
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for
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food
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 but
also
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 it can
be increasing
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increase
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health
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the health
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deases
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diseases
 of life. On the one side,
people
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nowdays
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nowadays
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use
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thechnical
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technical
 methods in farming. They
wat
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want
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 to grow a
larse
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large
 quantity of products and
a
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apply
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use
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of
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chemical products
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so ithey
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ithey
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they
 can grow easily. In
addion
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addition
,
population
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the population
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 have been increasing
a
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for a
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couple of
decade
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decades
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due to
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 high
populaton
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population
, it is necessary to grow
vegetable
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vegetables
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to
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for
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 them which only factory farming can supply
this
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 need of
people
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.
For example
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, one research demonstrated by Oxford in 2017,
they
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apply
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found
the
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that
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 factory
farmig
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farming
 can grow a
larse
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large
 number of
food
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 in
less place
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fewer places
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 and
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in few
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few
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fewer
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period
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periods
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. they do not
use
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 soil for farming
in contrast
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, they
use
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of
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water they can produce very good vegetables.
Secondly
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,
thechnical
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technical
farm
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farms
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 are using a lot of
chemical
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chemicals
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 on
vegetable
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a vegetable
the vegetable
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that is
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a danger
the danger
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danger
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dangerous
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for
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to
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people
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people's
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 lives.
the
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diabetes and obesity have been
incresing
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increasing
 in
day
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 by
day
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.
Moreover
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,
peopel
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people
 are suffering
this
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deases
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disease
diseases
. recent
reserch
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research
 showed that
there
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their
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food
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 is chemical
food
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 which
impcated
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impacted
implicated
wome's
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women's
 health.
Furethermore
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Furthermore
, the PCOD number are
incresing
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increasing
day
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 by
day
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 the reason
of
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for
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this
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only
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is only
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 unnatural
food
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 which
come
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comes
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 from factory farming, the reason
of
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for
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this
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 some
people
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belileve
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believe
 that we must do only
tradiional
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traditional
 farming.
To conclude
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,
the
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chemical farming is
the
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a
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 need of high
polulation
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population
pollution
.
However
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, I
totaly
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totally
 believe
the
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traditional farming is always good for our
overall
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 health.

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Language
Improve spelling and grammar: Ensure that spelling is correct (e.g., "thechnical" should be "technical", "mehod" to "method", "deases" to "diseases").
Language
Use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance readability and express your ideas more clearly.
Content
Clarify and strengthen your arguments, particularly regarding the benefits and drawbacks of modern farming vs. traditional methods.
Content
Provide specific examples and support to strengthen your points, particularly in relation to health concerns related to factory farming.
Content
The essay presents both views on modern and traditional farming practices, which is a positive structural aspect.
Content
There is a clear personal opinion given at the conclusion, showing that you have formed a stance on the issue.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • factory farming
  • global demand
  • sustainable
  • ethical implications
  • antibiotic resistance
  • genetically modified organisms (GMOs)
  • precision farming
  • crop yields
  • biodiversity loss
  • food sovereignty
  • technological advances
  • resilience
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