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The charts below show the percentage of people using public transport and that of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the percentage of people using public transport and that of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates the proportion of the individuals who rely on private vehicles and the ones who
uses
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 public transportation in five different Australian cities.
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 people in Brisbane
chosed
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choose
chosen
chose
 to use public transportation the most, in Adelaide cars were more prevalent. A closer examination
to
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 the graph reveals that Brisbane came as the top utilization for public transportation. In 2000, it began with 15% and started to increase gradually and almost doubled in 2010. Meanwhile, Merbourne and Sdyney
,
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 began with
proportion
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proportions
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 of approximately 20 and 20 respectively.
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, they did not rise as much as Brisbane.
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,except for Melbourne and Sydney,
ratio
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the ratio
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 for individualized
vehicle
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vehicles
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 stayed stable.
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, they fluctuated over time. Adelia had the highest
percent
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 in 2000. It started with 70% and only inclined
mildy
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mildly
 over time.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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