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Writing Samples
Band 2

You work for an international company and need to take some time off work to celebrate a family event.

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Dear Smith The reason why I am writing
this
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 letter is
that
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apply
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to avail of my paid leave for nine days next month from October two,to October eleven,to attend my mother's 40th birthday. I am very fond of him and want to spend time with him and
also
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 receive his blessings.
Inspite
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In spite
 of
this
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 fact,I have invited from all over the world.I am very lonely with my mother because I have been one year since I
have
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have to
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 apply seen my mum. During my absence,My close friend Tom
takesover
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takes over
takeover
works
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work
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 and exercises.He has been performing exceptionally well and is very responsible.
Morover
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Moreover
,I have drafted a plan which he can execute.I will have limited access to emails,and you can reach out to me in case of emergencies. I am looking
apply
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apply
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forward. Yours faithfully. Jim.

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The introduction could be clearer by directly stating the purpose of the letter without unnecessary wording.
coherence and cohesion
Try to separate your points into clear paragraphs for better readability.
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Make sure to provide specific examples or details related to your relationship with your mother to strengthen your request.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling and grammatical errors for a more polished presentation, such as 'apply' instead of 'I have applied' or 'I have been one year since I have seen my mum.'
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The letter conveys a personal and sincere tone, showing the importance of the event to the writer.
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You have provided arrangements for your work duties during your absence, demonstrating responsibility.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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