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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The graph displays the average monthly changes in the price of
three
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 metals during 2014. The changing trend of
Copper
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 and
Zinc
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 is stable. The price of
Zinc
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 changed the most in February, which was 3% higher than that in January.
Copper
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 changed by 2% in January, which was the biggest
change
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. The price of
Zinc
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 changed the lowest in June and October, and compared with the previous month, it changed by minus 1%.
Copper
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 changed the least in May and June, with a negative 0.5%
change
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 compared with the previous month.
Copper
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 and
Zinc
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 have not changed in the
three
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months
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 of July, August and September. The biggest trend of
change
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 is Nickel. Nickel changed by 6% in January, which was the time when it changed the most. In February and March, it fell sharply to 1%. There was no
change
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 in March and April, and
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 slowly fell to minus 0.5%. In May, it suddenly dropped sharply to minus 3%. It rose a little in June. There is no
change
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 in the seventh, eighth and ninth
months
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, just like the other two metals, which is minus one
percent
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per cent
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. It began to rise sharply to 1% in October, and there was no
change
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 in the
last
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 two
months
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, stopping at 1%.
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，
Copper
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 and
Zinc
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 are relatively stable, and Nickel is changing a lot. The same point is that these
three
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 metals have not changed in the
three
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months
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 of July, August and September.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, copper, zinc, change, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 16 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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