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The graph below shows U.S. Energy Consumption by Fuel (1980-2030). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Umar

The graph below shows U.S. Energy Consumption by Fuel (1980-2030). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Umar
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The line graph represents information about U.S energy expenditure by fuel from 1980 to 2030 .
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,the line illustrated the energy expenditure of Nuclear ,Solar/Wind and Hydropower all of these things together initiated with
same
Change the article
the same

It appears that the phrase same indicator does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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 indicator . The consumption of Petro and Oil by fuel in 1980 was 35
quadrillion
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 units and decade by decade fluctuated ,eventually started to progressively increase and will reach a peak
around
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of around

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 50
quadrillion
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 units of
usages
Fix the agreement mistake
usage

It seems that usages may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 oil in 2030.The usage of Coal and Natural Gas fluctuated marginally between each other
nevertheless
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
had
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb had appears to be unnecessary here.

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 a rose showing approximately 27
quadrillion
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 things for Coal and less than 25
quadrillion
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 for Natural Gas. Nuclear ,Solar/Wind and Hydropower all
of
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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them
Correct pronoun usage
apply

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had similar energy production , 3quadrillion items ,their consumption started to oscillate little and in the end all of them by projections will have a different expenditure by oil ,Nuclear quantity will have more than 5
quadrillion
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 things for,Solar/Wings exactly 5
quadrillion
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 figures,
while
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 only Hydropower is predicted to decrease less than 5quadrillion dollars .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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