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The graph below shows U.S. Energy Consumption by Fuel (1980-2030). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Umar 2

The graph below shows U.S. Energy Consumption by Fuel (1980-2030). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Umar 2
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The line graph represented information about U.S energy expenditure by fuel between 1980 to 2030 .
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,the line illustrated the expense
by
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of
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oil
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the oil
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 of Nuclear ,Solar/Wind and Hydropower all of these things together initiated with
same
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 indicator . The consumption of Petro and
Oil
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 by fuel in 1980 was 35
quadrillion
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 units and decade by decade fluctuated ,eventually started to progressively increase and will reach a peak around 50
quadrillion
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 units of
usages
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oil
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 in 2030.The usage of Coal and Natural Gas fluctuated marginally between each other
nevertheless
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,
had
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 a rose showing approximately 27
quadrillion
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 things for Coal and less than 25
quadrillion
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 for Natural Gas. Nuclear ,Solar/Wind and Hydropower all of them had similar energy production , 3quadrillion items
,
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started to
oscillated
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 little and in the
end
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 all of them by projections will have a different expenditure by
oil
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 ,Nuclear quantity will have more than 5
quadrillion
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 things for,Solar/Wings exactly 5
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quadrillion
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quadrillions
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 and only Hydropower will
have
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 decrease less than 5
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quadrillion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, quadrillion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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