In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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It is considered that some
people
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to have a home rather than
rent
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one. The reason for that may be in
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benefits that
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owning
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a home can bring as nowadays renting a home is quite expensive. I think that it
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positive trend as I find owing way more convenient in many aspects
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renting can bring some issues. Many
people
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dream
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their own property, particularly homes
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various reasons. One of the primary reasons is that individuals do not have to pay
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rent
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.
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, even in the suburbs renting a flat is not cheap and very often prices go up from one year to another . Results of the recent survey conducted by local activists in Hampshire
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that local
people
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are not satisfied with
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the prices
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of the
rent
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and they claim that prices increased by 45% in
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4 years. I consider that
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is a positive situation which can make
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work harder, learn financial literacy and achieve more success and comfort in their lives.
People
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who have some goals are keen to save more money to realize their aims. Recent trends show that the young prefer to buy cars and houses rather than
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them as they think that it is meaningless to pay a big amount of money for something
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not theirs,
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they can get a credit and pay it every month and
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have their own property.
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, most of the population of post-Soviet countries think that it is very important to have your own place to live so they save money and buy houses, flats or apartments by their
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. In conclusion, I find it logical that many
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prefer to have their own homes rather than
rent
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ones because it is less expensive and more logical and it is a positive trend.

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task achievement
Your essay presents some good ideas but could benefit from clearer explanations. For example, expanding on why owning a home is considered more economical could strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow between your ideas. Some transitions between sentences and paragraphs could be smoother. Using linking words could improve the overall coherence of your essay.
task achievement
Ensure that your examples are relevant and support your main points effectively. For instance, providing more details about the survey findings could enhance your argument.
task achievement
You effectively identified economic benefits as a primary reason for preferring home ownership over renting.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear opinion on the topic and your conclusion summarizes your main points well, reflecting a logical thought process.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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