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There is a problem related to the canging room of your gym in your community.You reported it several times,but it was not solved.Write a letter to the manager. Describe the problem What they said while reporting the problem What you want the manager to do

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Dear Sir or Madam I would like to complain about
pathetic
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 condition of the gym's changing room in our community.The negligence of the authorities towards
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 issue has been
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disappointing
dissapointing
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disappointing
 The
door
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 is made of an inexpensive commodity of wood.
Due to
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 roof leakage,there is rot on the bottom of the
door
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. It has rotten to the
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 that nearly 1/4
th quanity
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the quantity
 of wood at the bottom is missing.
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 repeated
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 to the local authorities to replace the
door
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 ,they sent
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a carpenter
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 who did some preservative techniques and told us that was well.
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However
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 the decay began again after some time.When he
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rang
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 up again,he said that the
door
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has
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 to be replaced.It has been a month since
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 report was given ,
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unfortunately
 the local authorities have been entirely indifferent about
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. So, I have no choice but to write to you .I request you to replace the
door
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 at the earliest looking forward to your immediate action
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this
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 problem. Yours faithfully Madina

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize the letter in clear paragraphs to improve readability. For instance, discuss each topic in a separate paragraph: the problem, previous responses, and your request.
task achievement
Be mindful of errors and typos, such as 'dissapointing' should be 'disappointing', and 'extant' should be 'extent'. Proofreading can help ensure clarity and accuracy.
task achievement
You effectively described the problem with specific details, which helps in understanding the severity of the situation.
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Your tone is appropriate for the letter, maintaining a polite yet assertive manner throughout.
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