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Band 3.5

Are there more advantages to living in a city than in the country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Living in a
city
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 and living in the countryside each
offer
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offers
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own
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their own
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 advantages:
however
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, urban life generally provides more benefits in
term
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terms
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 of
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oppotunities
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opportunities
and
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apply
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modern amenities and medicare access. One of the main advantages of living in the
city
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 is
acces
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access
 to better job
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oppotunities
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opportunities
.
City
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 is the economic
hubs
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hub
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 where multinational companies, industries, and Businesses thrive
which
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apply
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creating a wide range of employment options.
In
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On
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 the other
hands
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hand
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, rural areas often have limited career prospects,
while
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priorily
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priority
primarily
centered
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centred
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 around agriculture or small local businesses. For
intance
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instance
, Many
new
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newly
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 graduated students need to go to Bangkok,
a
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the
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 capital of Thailand, or other nearby
Bangkok's
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Bangkok
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 areas
for finding
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to find
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 better job
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oppotunities
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opportunities
 rather than work in
a
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the
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 countryside.
Second,
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City
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the City
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 provides a greater variety of entertainment and
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is accessable
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accessable
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accessible
. A
city
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 caters to diverse interests;
for example
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,
shoping
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shopping
 malls, restaurants, theatres,
museams
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museums
, and other recreational
centers
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centres
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. Since a
city
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 is
the
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a
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 place where most
of
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apply
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healthcare
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the healthcare
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centers
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centres
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 are located, people
could
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can
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 apply for
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 system
easier
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more easily
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 than those who
living
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live
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 in a country. Someone who
enjoy
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enjoys
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 nightlife and cultural events will find a
city
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 more exciting than a rural area. in conclusion,
while
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 living in the countryside
offer
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offers
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 its benefits,
city
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 life provides more advantages in
term
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terms
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job
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of job
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oppotunities
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opportunities
,
Healthcare
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a Healthcare
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 system and entertainment for diverse cultural interests. the convenience and accessibility of urban living make it a more
favorable
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favourable
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 choice for individuals who looking to improve their quality of life.

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coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow between your paragraphs by using linkers or transition phrases such as 'firstly', 'secondly', or 'in addition'.
task achievement
In your introduction, be clear about your stance on the advantages of city living compared to country living. A clear thesis statement would strengthen your argument.
language
Correct spelling mistakes such as 'oppotunities' and 'acces' to improve the clarity of your essay. Consider using varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.
task achievement
You effectively presented your main points about job opportunities and entertainment, which are relevant advantages of city living.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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