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The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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These graphs show information about
salaries
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 at
police
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 stations for the years 2017 and 2018. The table illustrates where the station got the
money
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 from and the pie graph displays how the cash was divided. It is clear from the graph that there was an
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 significantly in the budget
in
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 three sources.
Police
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 spent more
money
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 on people's
salaries
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 and staff than the other two sections.
According to
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 what is shown, the national government was the highest among all to give
money
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 for around 175.5 to 177.8 million respectively.
while
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 the second place to give
money
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 was local taxes that the people buy for, it was 91.2 to 102.3 million. The lowest salary comes from other sources, which was 38 to just about 38.5 million.
Police
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 stations spent cash in three different categories.
Salaries
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 for officers and staff were higher than technology, buildings and transport in 2017
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 large proportion,
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 in 2018 dropped to just under 70 per cent. Buildings and transport remained the same as before in 2017 and 2018 around 17%.
However
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, policemen
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 less
money
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in
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on
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 technology
for
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about 8% and 14% respectively.
To sum up
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 we could say that, the government give a high amount of
money
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 to
police
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 stations.
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, policemen spend a lot of
money
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 on
salaries
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 for officers and staff.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, police, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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