The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The first map indicates Grange Park on Arnold Avenue established in 1920 and the other illustrates the very same place today.

In addition

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, these two maps show the differences that

this

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public field has had during these years.

However

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, there were two entrances before, now there is a new one which is for the underground car park. There was a water fountain right in the middle of

this

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area, but now it is replaced with a rose garden

that is

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surrounded by chairs, and there is just another rose garden in the top left of the park,

while

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there were three rose fields in past.

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, a café was built in the place of the third one was before. Near the underground entrance, there is now a water feature

instead

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of the glasshouse in 1920.

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, there is no longer a music stage in it replaced with an Amphitheatre for concerts.

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, despite the rose gardens and entrances everything is now in

this

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area.

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task achievement

Make sure to clearly outline the main differences between the two maps, focusing on significant changes in structure and function. Some points could be explained further for added clarity.

coherence and cohesion

Enhance the organization by using more linking words or phrases to connect your ideas, which will help the reader follow your arguments more easily.

positive

You provided a good overview of the changes in the park, identifying some key elements that have transformed over time.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

164 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

recreational facilities
landscaping
naturalistic
amenities
formal gardens
ergonomic
symmetric designs
inclusive
accessible
accommodations
native plant species
societal changes
visitor services
community events
evolution
modern playgrounds
wildflower meadows

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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the future all cars ,buses,and trucks will be driverless .the only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passangers . Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outhwight the disadvantage ?

“Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programmes regardless of their level of academic ability”. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Some people believe that to be successful at a sport, you need natural ability, ‎and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss ‎both views, and give your opinion?