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Band 5.5

The line graph illustrates average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services from 2001 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph shows the average yearly spending on mobile
phone
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 and home
phone
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 services between the years 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 both services have
oppset
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opposite
 trends, on the one hand, the residential
phone
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 shows a rise in
services
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service
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 cost,
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on
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and on
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 the cell
phone
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servies
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services
service
expense
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expenses
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 declined throughout the years. In 2001, the cell
phone
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 yearly spend was about 200$
then
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 started to skyrocket till it reached
thier
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its
 peak in 2010,
the
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when the
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 average
become
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became
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 nearly 800$.
While
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 residential
phone
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 bills
was
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were
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 at
its
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their
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 highest peak at the beginning of the 00s about 700$ per year,
then
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face
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faced
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dramatically
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a dramatic
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 fall and reached almost 400$
in
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at
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 the end of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words phone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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