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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in1928, 1958 and 2008

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in1928, 1958 and 2008
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The graph shows information about learners whose enrollments at the
University
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 of Bristol in three years started in 1928, 1958, and 2008. In general, we can observe that the total of students who enrolled in
university
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 from overseas was 28% in 2008 compared to other years. In more detail, we can see that the number of students who registered for higher education in 1928 was 218; the percentage of females was 42%, males were 58%, and other people who came from different countries were 5%.
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, 1046 of the persons who entered the
university
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 in 1958, the ratio divided between women and men 32% and 68%, respectively,
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 6% came from different countries. One notable is that, in 2008, there was a lower percentage of overseas students who enrolled in
university
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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