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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS

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The bar chart provides information about the use of social networking
sites
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 in Canada from 2014 to 2015.
Overall
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, there were fluctuating numbers in the five different
sites
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 from 2014 to 2015. The highest count of people using multiple social networks in these two years was
one
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sites
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, but the lowest was five. Looking at the first period in 2014, there was a significant increase from no
site
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 to
one
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site
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. The total experienced upward almost 15%,
although
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 it continued downward in the second
sites
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 until the end.
Secondly
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,
according to
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 the chart, no
site
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 and
one
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site
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 in 2014 had a higher amount than in 2015.
However
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, the percentage of other
sites
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 in 2014 tended lower than in 2015.
On the other hand
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, the total of citizens applying social communication in 2015 tended upward and downward too. It increased from no
site
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 to
one
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site
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 by almost 10%
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 and decreased to 4% in the
last
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site
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.
In addition
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, the declining trend from three
sites
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 to five in 2015 looked like a two-fold reduction.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, one, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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