Some people believe that art, such as painting and music, does not improve people’s lives, so the government should not spend money on it. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experiences.

Undoubtedly, it is a keen

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responsibility

of the government to plan the financial budget in order to improve the

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growth of the economy. The financial terms can include the expenditure on health, infrastructure, and

mueseum

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museum

which includes paintings and

music

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. The spending power should be in the hands of the law bodies so that the

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focus can be on the world. Some individuals justify that the money spent on the paintings and

music

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is not worthy as these events

has

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no contribution in order to

improve

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improving

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the living standard of the

poople

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people

but

i

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partially agree with

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statement as these events not only

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fame to the economy but

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also

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improves the lifestyle of the individual.

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, recently couple of months back there was a

music

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concert

of

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the famous

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singer Daljit Dosanjh who performed in different parts of the globe. Not only he

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the

music

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industry

to

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the

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different level but has

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generated

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income for the people. The concert has created

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millions

of job offers

to

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the

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unemployed people. So if the law bodies are willing to spend the money on these events

than

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defintely

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definitely

it serves the purpose.

On

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the

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contrast, looking at the

scenerios

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scenarios

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of the world individuals are living below the poverty line. There are no jobs which could satisfy the hunger. And

personally

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i

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think the issues like poverty, unemployment,

poor

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and poor

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conditions of the hospitals

needs

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to be on the priority list of the

governement

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government

. Not only these sectors will help youth to survive but will

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lead to the

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developement

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development

of the

ecoomy

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economy

. In conclusion,

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the

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music

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and paintings

helps

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to boost the nation

but

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it is the

responsibilty

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responsibility

of the

governement

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government

to utilise the resources in

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a way that

it

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becomes

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the blessings of the people.