Studies show that crime rates are lower among those with educational degree. Therefore, the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals while they are in prison. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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to society of any country, it
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chaos,fear,excessive expenses and so on.
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that people who have educational
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tend to commit
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less. So, educating criminals who are in prison can be
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reducing
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crime
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the crime

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rate.
This
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essay will explore
this
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idea in
details
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and explain why
i
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completely agree with
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statement. Many people propose that offenders need to be taught academic subjects by
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. Because
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represent that
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propotion
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of
crime
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is committed
due to
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lack of
education
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or just jobless.
Education
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in prison
help
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helps

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them to
adopt
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adapt

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back to society. If they learn
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a job

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or some form of profession
while
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in imprisonment, when they will be free, their occupation will allow them to earn enough money to live
from
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legal ways.
For instance
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, some countries have already started a campaign
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they teach a former prisoner to IT,
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business

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, crafts and other spheres. Why
i
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also
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support
this
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idea
is
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because
according to
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statistics,
right
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education
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reduce
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recurrence
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of crimes.
in addition
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, a person who
have
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a certain professions
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will never go back to the streets of
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.
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, in counties
such
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as
,
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Norwey
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Netherland
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where
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imprisonment system is based on
education
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,
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crime
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rate is
very
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lower
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. I suppose that it is
also
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beneficial to
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of the country.
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is because when
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find a job,
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and other social payments. In conclusion, providing prisoners with
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of receiving jobs can be the key to
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crime
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help
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them to
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to society and minimize
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probabilty
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of
criminiality
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criminality

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. So
this
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way will be beneficial for both
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governments
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and
criminials
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criminals
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in the long term.

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grammatical accuracy
Ensure proper spelling and grammar; for example, 'goverments' should be 'governments' and 'Statiscics' should be 'Statistics'.
cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of ideas, especially in connecting sentences and paragraphs; consider using linking words for better transitions.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or statistics to strengthen your arguments; mention research findings or credible sources.
content
You demonstrate a clear understanding of the topic and effectively express your agreement with the statement.
structure
The overall structure of your essay is clear, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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