Some people say that hard work will always bring financial sucess. Others say that hard word work is nt enough and that other things are also needed for financial success. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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whether hard

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working enough for budget success, I do not think

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apply

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serious

working

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is enough to get

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budget

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many reasons. In

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both views and give my opinion.

On the other hand

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, Some people believe serious

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is enough to bring financial success. They mean the

hard working

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only the factor to bring a huge salary,

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grammar

Make sure to proofread your essay for grammatical errors, spelling mistakes, and punctuation. For instance, 'serious working' should be 'hard work', and 'nt' should be 'not'.

content

Develop your ideas further. Provide specific examples or scenarios which illustrate both viewpoints; this would enhance your arguments.

structure

Ensure that you include both sides in your essay, clearly presenting arguments for and against hard work alone leading to financial success.

content

You have made an effort to address both sides of the argument, which is important in a discussion essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

65 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial success
hard work
dedication
perseverance
obstacles
skills development
experience
entrepreneur
work ethic
affluent background
education
social connections
market opportunities
external circumstances
economic conditions
technological advancements
context
strategic planning
adaptability

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Some people say that hard work will always bring financial sucess. Others say that hard word work is nt enough and that other things are also needed for financial success. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that successful sports teams are always those with the strongest or fittest players. Others think that success depends more on the team’s mental strength. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent years many local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers to do their shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

Some today argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from the internet and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?