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The chart below shows the book sales for five different types of fiction books from 2006 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts illustrate
that
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the
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 fiction
book
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 sales' gross
earnings
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 between 2006 and 2010,
which
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apply
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divided into 5 genres(Young adult, Classics, Mystery,
Romance
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, Sci-fi & Fantasy).
Overall
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,
romance
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books
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was
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were
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 sold the most, leading
the
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to the
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 highest gross
earnings
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 over the given period,
whereas
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 Sci-Fi &
Fantashy
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fantasy
books
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was
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were
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 sold the least, which meant the smallest
earnings
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. Looking at the relations between sales and
earnings
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, the amount of
earnings
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 of
romance
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book
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books
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was
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apply
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rose
initally
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initially
 from $8,000,000 in 2006 to $ 11,000,000 in 2007, but
shown
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showed
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significant
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a significant
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 decline to $7,000,000 in 2008.
However
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, the
earnings
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 of
romance
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book
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 sales increased consistently, exceeding $8,000,000 in 2010.
Similarly
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, mystery fiction
book
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earnings
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also
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 increased at
frist
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first
 from $6,000,000 in 2006 to $ 8,000,000 in 2007,
fallen
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fell
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 to $5,000,000 in 2008 and $4,800,000 in 2009,
while
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 slightly increased to $ 5,800,000 in 2010. Turning to the three
reamining
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remaining
 data sets, young adult
books
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earnings
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was
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were
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 nearly $3,000,000 in 2006 and 2007,
decrasing
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decreasing
 to under $2,000,000 in 2008,
while
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 the
earnings
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 of young adult
books
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 rose from $2,500,000 in 2009 to $3,000,000 in 2010.
Additionally
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, the
earnings
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 of classics were almost 2,000,000 in 2006, showing fluctuation between 2006 and 2009, resulting in $1,000,000 in 2010, which was the lowest
earnings
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.
Furthermore
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,
scifi
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sci-fi
books
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also
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 increased slightly from $1,800,000 in 2006 to $2,000,000 in 2010. Continuously, decreased to $1,000,000 in 2009, showing
small
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a small
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 increase in 2010, reaching
to
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apply
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$ 1,500,000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words book, earnings, romance, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales trend
  • comparison
  • sales figures
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • spike in sales
  • drop in sales
  • contributing factors
  • popularity
  • societal trends
  • cultural trends
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