A friend who lives in another city has invited you to an event. You are unable to accept the invitation. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -Thank him/her for the invitation -Explain why you cannot come -Suggest another time to meet him/her

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Dear sandy, I hope you're doing well. Thank you for inviting me to the music concert. Since childhood, I have always wanted to attend the music concert and enjoy the experience. Even though I am very eager to attend the show,

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some unavoidable circumstances, I can't attend it. After graduation, I applied for many jobs in

bangalore

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Bangalore

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and got selected in one of them. As

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hiring process, I have to complete a compulsory

two month

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internship onsite. Right now, we are facing some financial issues, so getting

this

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job is very important for my family. Once I

appointed

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job

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the job

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it'll be easier to get

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. So, I promise I

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visit next summer and we can explore different adventurous activities in your city. Thank you for understanding my situation. I look forward to your response Warm regards, Santhoshkumar

ksanthosh701Mon Feb 17 2025

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Task Achievement

Consider adding a brief introduction that specifically acknowledges the event before expressing your thanks.

Coherence and Cohesion

In the paragraph explaining why you cannot attend, try to be more concise to enhance clarity. The sentence about financial issues could be clearer if slightly rephrased.

Coherence and Cohesion

You might want to clarify the timeline for your visit by specifying 'next summer'—is it a particular month?

Tone

The letter maintains a friendly tone throughout, which is very appropriate for a letter to a friend.

Task Achievement

You effectively expressed gratitude for the invitation and provided a personal reason for not attending, making your response relatable.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

142 words

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A friend who lives in another city has invited you to an event. You are unable to accept the invitation. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -Thank him/her for the invitation -Explain why you cannot come -Suggest another time to meet him/her

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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