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The chart below shows the information on how frequently people in the USA ate in fastfood restaurants between 2003 and 2013

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The bar charts indicate the frequency of fast food consumption of the Americans in a restaurant in 2003, 2006 and 2013. Most
of
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the
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Americans prefer to go
fast
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 food restaurants at least on time in a week in every recorded
year
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, and the other big proportion usually decides to eat once or twice a month regardless of the
year
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. Meanwhile, daily consumers and non-consumers were always below
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10%. Regarding once-a-week consumers and once or twice-a-month customers showed that they were never lower than 25% of society in any
year
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.
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, for the weekly customers, the peak happened in 2006 by approximately 32% which matches with the peak of the at least one time in a month consumers reached in 2013. The percentage of
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people who eat several times a week never
exceed
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 20% and never
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 below 15% between 2003 and 2013.
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, people who eat only a few times a
year
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 the maximum rate of people by 15% in 2006 and 2013,
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 the rate was quite lower previously, specifically in 2003.

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