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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical applianices and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feafures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical applianices and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feafures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs indicate the rate of availability and usage
for
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of
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 several electrical products,
such
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 as washing
machine
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machines
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,
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, in one country's households between 1920 and 2019. The most impressive record is that the number of hours of housework gradually decreases over the entire time period. Simultaneously, every house
of
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in
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 the country
own
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owned
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refrigerator
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a refrigerator
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 and vacuum cleaner by the end of
20th
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the 20th
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 century. In 1920, more than 60% of the individuals
does
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did
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 not have all
products
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the products
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, it is worth
to highlight
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highlighting
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 that
refrigerator
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 ownership was around 1%, and
then
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 two decades later, product sales skyrocketed and even
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 reached exactly 50% of the ownership. By 1980, all products
keep
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kept
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raising
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rising
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, except washing
machine
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machines
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, since it fluctuated after
a
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an
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 initial surge.
Finally
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, in 2019, almost 73% of the society
own
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owned
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 a washing machine,
although
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 they all bought a
refrigerator
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 and a vacuum cleaner. The housework duration per week sharply falls below 30% in 1960,
thereafter
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, it keeps falling with baby steps until reaching approximately 11% in 2019.

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