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ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A plethora of
people
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 make their perception about the other person at their initial meeting and set their mind
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 whether they want to connect with that person in future or not.
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 I do not
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 with
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 statement to a great extent
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its other side cannot be neglected which will be discussed in
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 disquisition.
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 and the foremost reason behind my view is that a single meeting is not enough to judge the nature of an individual. Few folks are reserved and shy in nature or lack
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communication, so their
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 appearance always seems to be cold.
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 ice persona melts away when we allow them to warm up with us.
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, some pupils are not liked because of their lack of dressing sense.
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 is completely unfair as dressing
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 can be changed with the passage of time.
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, if we write off
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 too quickly, we might lose a chance of good
friendship
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, potential
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 and even romantic relationships. Undoubtedly, liking or disliking someone at
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 instance seems to be unfair.
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, “Every coin has its two sides”. We all are aware of the fact that the
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 impression is the
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 one. You don’t get a second chance to make a
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 impression.
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,
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people
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 behave in
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 and respectful manner to create
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 impact on
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society.
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, even though judging
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people
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 instantly has negative consequences,
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maintaining the
first
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 impression
help
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the
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people
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keep them on their toes.
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, reading human beings on the basis of their nature, dressing sense or communication skills can prevent us
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from making
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 some good relations in life.

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task achievement
Try to develop your ideas more fully by providing specific examples or anecdotes to support your stance. For instance, consider including a personal experience to illustrate your point about misjudging someone based on their first impression.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs are clearly organized and follow a logical flow. Each paragraph should ideally support a single main idea, which is clearly stated. Consider using transition phrases to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Pay careful attention to clarity and formality in language. Avoid using colloquial phrases like 'every coin has its two sides' and strive for clearer expressions of your ideas, particularly in the conclusion.
task achievement
You presented a balanced argument by acknowledging both sides of the issue, which demonstrates critical thinking.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a framework for your discussion.
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