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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart and table depict the professional paths of Anthropology
graduates
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 from a specific university, showcasing their
employment
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 status and salary levels five years after graduation. The majority of
graduates
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 are currently employed full-time, with varying estimated salaries and
employment
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 sectors. The pie chart indicates that more than half (52%) of the
graduates
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 secured full-time
employment
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. A smaller proportion (15%) pursued full-time postgraduate studies,
while
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 5% remained unemployed.
Additionally
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, 8% worked part-time, and another 8% combined part-time work with
further
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 studies. The
employment
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 status of 12% of
graduates
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 is unknown. The table presents salary distributions across three
employment
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 sectors. Freelance consultants and government
sector
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 employees tend to earn higher salaries, with 40% and 50% earning $100,000 or more, respectively.
In contrast
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, private company employees earn lower salaries, with only 30% making six figures.
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, the private
sector
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 has a larger proportion (35%) of employees earning between $50,000 and $74,999, compared to 15% in the government
sector
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 and freelance consulting.
Overall
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, most Anthropology
graduates
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 find full-time
employment
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, and government
sector
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 jobs offer the highest earning potential after five years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, employment, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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