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Some people say social media do more harm to the youth. Other people say they do the great to the youth. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include examples from your knowledge and experience.

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Social
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daily
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life
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, which leads them to forget about the harm of
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social
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youths
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highly
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disturb
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their
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different
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relationships with their
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teachers
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social
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their
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emotional
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habit
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 fall into health issues.Which mainly will be eating unhealthy food, moving around spending more time on
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different
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issues
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,
youts
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youth
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 normally interact with different
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types
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 of people on
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social
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without
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thier
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their
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 and they might be scammed by the
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socila
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social
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platfrom
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platform
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hand
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 they might
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alot
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a lot
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online shopping .
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, some people might think that social
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beneficial
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youths
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,as it helps them in
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thier
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their
educations
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helps them in
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thier assigmnts
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their assignments
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, social
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youth
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nowadays
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popularity
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digital
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their
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experernce
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experiences
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according to
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experience
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social
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platform
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different things, as
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teachers
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available
 for 24 hours but ,social
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 has its pros and cons in it ,which might be harmful to our
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day
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beneficial
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task achievement
Try to improve your introduction by clearly stating both sides of the argument and summarizing your opinion ahead of time. This will help guide the reader through your discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance the logical structure and flow of your ideas. This will allow the reader to follow your arguments more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Proofread your essay for spelling and grammatical errors. This will improve your overall clarity and make your writing more effective.
task achievement
You provide a balanced discussion by acknowledging both sides of the argument, which is a positive aspect of your essay.
task achievement
Your use of examples from personal experience adds depth to your argument and enhances your overall message.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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