Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to make families closer?

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Todays

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Today

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the world is

change

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changing

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and

the

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apply

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social life

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very complicated.

Few

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A few

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years ago

families

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have been changed.

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essay will explain why

families

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are not

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as close

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as in the past and show some solutions to fix

this

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issue. There are many factors

lead to

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that

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weaken the relationship between the members of the family. First of all,

families

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don't have

time

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to be together.

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parents

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spend a long

time

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in their

jop

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job

after that they feel

tird

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tired

and have a rest.

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their children after school they are busy

plaing

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playing

planning

and studying.

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tecnology

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technology

and social media have been the most important thing for

every one

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everyone

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couses

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causes

many

problem

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problems

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with

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the apility

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apility

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ability

communicat

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communicate

in real life.

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its

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waist

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wastes

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the free

time

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for

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the family.

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, lack of knowledge for

families

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about the positive

effect

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effects

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of communication with each other.

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ther

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there

are some solutions to make

families

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closer.

First,

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parents

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should set a

time

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for gathering every day

especialy

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especially

for lunch. That plan gives

family

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the family

a family

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a special

time

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for making a lovely memory.

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parents

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have to limit the use of social media and try to connect with their

chldren

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children

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parents

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must teach their children to visit their grandparents and make a relationship with their

cusons

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sons

cousins

customs

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verey

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very

important point and useful to be

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a closur

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closur

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closer

and stronger family. In conclusion,

its

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it's

it is

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clear to see that there are several issues

lead

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that lead

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break

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breaking

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the

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apply

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families

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However

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, there are many solutions to fix

this

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problem.

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task achievement

Provide clearer explanations of the causes of family disconnection with more specific examples to illustrate your points.

coherence and cohesion

Enhance the logical flow of ideas between paragraphs by using more linking phrases to guide the reader.

general

Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, which can distract from your ideas.

task achievement

Consider adding more detailed examples and elaboration on your solutions to further support your points.

structure

The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

content

The topic is relevant and important, reflecting contemporary societal issues.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
33
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

249 words

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Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to make families closer?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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In the future ,we will havr more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home amd at work.Discuss thr challenges and benefits this will bring

Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people think we need more female leaders to create world peace and reduce violence. To what extent do you agree?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How people can research this?