The graph below gives information on the numbers of particpants for a different activiities at one social centre in melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

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The provided graph illustrates different activities that individuals took part in, at a social

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Melborn

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Melbourne

in a 20 years time gap (2000 to 2020). From an

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point of view, it can be observed that the most popular activity has been the film club over the whole period and others had fluctuations and were not so steady.

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with, it can be witnessed that after the film club, material arts used to be the second place with around 35 participants up until 2015, when table tennis rose significantly to over 50 and took the lead.

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, in 2000, amateur dramatics stood at 25 and by 2005 it reached a peak of approximately 28 inspectors.

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, from that point on, it started to face a constant falling trend.

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, the first data on musical performances

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first shown in 2005 and since

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it started to raise to reach around 18 participants by 2020.

Taha Sol.Tue Feb 18 2025

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

156 words

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The graph below gives information on the numbers of particpants for a different activiities at one social centre in melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Some people believe that young people should choose the jobs that they want, but other people think they should be more realistic" and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

Holding International games such as The Olympic Games is an exciting event. Some people think that it has positive effects while other argue that it is a waste of money. Discuss both sides of view and give your own opinion.

University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studyng abroad outweigh the disadvantages?