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Some people believe that countries should produce food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some
people
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 that
nations
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 should feed their citizens through their own
food
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 production and should try to import
food
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 in the minimum quantity possible.
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 essay completely disagrees with the above statement because feeding countries' own
population
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populations
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 would restrict the economic growth of
nation
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the nation
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 and little imports would not allow
people
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 to experience a variety of
food
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 from all over the
world
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. To grow the economy of a country,
food
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 should be exported to different parts of the
world
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.
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 is because
distribution
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the distribution
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 of
food
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 in various
nations
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 would help a country make a good amount of money by selling them at the
better
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best
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 price available that would
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 help to boost the financial situation of a nation.
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, some developing
nations
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 like India and Bangladesh export large
quantity
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quantities
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 of their staple
food
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 and help to increase the
overall
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 economic condition.
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, experiencing a variety of
food
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 would be possible if
nations
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would start
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started
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 to import
food
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 in large quantities.
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 is to say that citizens would be able to enjoy
different
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a different
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 quality of
food
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 from all around the
world
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 as most of the regions in the
world
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does
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do
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 not have
favorable
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favourable
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 climatic conditions to support the production of
food
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such
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 as wheat, rice, coffee and many other
produces
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products
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.
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, all around the
world
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 India transports rice as its staple
food
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 all around the
world
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 and
help
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helps
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people
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 around the
world
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 to taste the best quality
food
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. In conclusion, I completely disagree that
nations
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 should only feed their own citizens because it would not allow them to prosper
their
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in their
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 economic conditions
,
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 and that imports should not be confined to
little
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small
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quantity
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quantities
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 as it would allow
people
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 to taste different foods all over the
world
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.

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task achievement
The argument could be strengthened by adding more detailed examples and statistics to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph has a clear main idea, and better connect your ideas and arguments to improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Good use of examples to illustrate your main points, particularly regarding food exports.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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