The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
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The provided pie and table chart display data on juveniles who are interested in the location and sorts of dance classes in a city in Australia.
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, private studios had the highest
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of people,
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ballet was the maximum with the amount of students under 11
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modern dance which belongs to the 11-16 age group. In more detail, private studios were 48%, making it almost
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half of students and the largest location that young people attended. In comparison, the smallest value was college-based studios, accounting for 10%. School halls (alter-school) were second highest with 24%, closely followed by community halls &
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, reaching 18% of
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of dance classes. In terms of ballet, approximately 610 under 11 students were interested as opposed to those who belong to the 11-16 age group with the number of 300.
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, tap class had approximately shown
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equality with both age groups, at 450 and 430, respectively.
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, 300 adolescents under 11 years old joined
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class,
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from 11 to 16 years old young ones participated with
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number of around 510.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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