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The charts below show the percentage spent on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage spent on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart describes per country and years 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005, how each government between Italy, Portugal,
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UK
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the UK
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 and
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USA
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the USA
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 spent on roads and transportation. Every year has a different color to be identified in the graphic blue, red, brown and yellow. In order to explain how those countries spent on roads and
transport
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, the graphic shows that the government that spent the most was Portugal in 1990 with almost
USD
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 27
Million
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.
Moreover
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, Portugal and Italy in 1995 and 2000 invested about
USD
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 24
Million
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,
then
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 Italy and Portugal used around
USD
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 22
Million
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 during 2000 and 1990.
In addition
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, Portugal allocated
USD
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 20
Million
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during
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in
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 2005 followed by Italy
that
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which
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 spent almost
USD
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 19
Million
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.
On the other hand
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, the government that invested the least
on
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in
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 roads and
transport
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 was the
UK
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 in 2005 about
USD
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 7
million
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 and in 1995 with almost
USD
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 9
Million
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.
Also
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, the
USA
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 was one of the countries which spent the least in 1995 having the lowest value
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USD
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of USD
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 10
million
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.
To conclude
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, Italy and Portugal
had
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have
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 invested the most in road and
transport
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 since 1990 but were decreasing during
the
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that
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 time.
On the contrary
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, the
UK
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 and the
USA
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 were the governments with the lowest
investing
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investment
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on
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in
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 road and
transport
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 the chart shows that the
USA
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 has been increasing their investment through the years
while
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 the
UK
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 has maintained the same behaviour spending
USD
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 7
million
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 and
USD
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 12
million
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as
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at
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 maximum.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, usa, transport, usd, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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