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Band 3

With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 with , there are many excellent reasons for exercising several times each week . First ,
people
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 who
exercise
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 look better .
Exercise
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 is important to keep our bodies in good shape .
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 ,
people
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 who
exercise
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 have more energy .
for example
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 , a Pearson who exercises can walk up stairs ,
climb
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and climb
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 hills more easily .
People
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how
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who
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exercise
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 have a healthier heart , too.
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 ,
exercise
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reduce
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 stress and helps you have a clear mind . Too much stress can you to worry a lot , and
that is
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 not good for your health . For these reasons , if you want to improve your
heath
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health
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, you should
exercise
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 regularly . Focusing
in
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 methods to motivate
people
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 to
exercise
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 more regularly, there are many ways to encourage individuals . First , reduce the cost of gym memberships because many
people
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 want to
exercise
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 every day but most gyms offer high
price
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prices
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.
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 ,
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people
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 awareness should be raised by warning them about potential
rsiks
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risks
 throughout schools and
workplace
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the workplace
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 .
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 , competitions play a significant role
to drive
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in driving
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people
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do
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to do
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 more
ecersice
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exercise
, because it
is create
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creates
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sense
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 of enthusiasm . I believe these methods will push
people
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 to take part in physical activities and improve their general
heath
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health
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.

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language
Make sure to proofread your work for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'Pearson' instead of 'person' and 'how' instead of 'who'.
structure
Your introduction and conclusion should clearly state your position on the topic and summarize your main points. Consider rephrasing your introduction to include a clear thesis statement.
content
Expand on your supporting points with more specific examples and details. This will help strengthen your arguments and provide clearer illustrations of your ideas.
content
You provided several valid reasons for exercise, which shows your understanding of the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • resource acquisition
  • inspire
  • funding allocations
  • global challenges
  • poverty alleviation
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • educational reform
  • long-term investments
  • economic growth
  • sustainable development
  • societal benefits
  • budgetary priorities
  • space industry
  • fiscal responsibility
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