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The pie charts below show the distribution of the population in Oman and Spain across three age groups in 2005 and provide a projection for the same categories 50 years later. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the distribution of the population in Oman and Spain across three age groups in 2005 and provide a projection for the same categories 50 years later. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the
age
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 group distribution of
individuals
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 in
Spain
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 and
Oman
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 for 2005 and an estimate for 2055. In 2005, half of
Oman
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's
population
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 consisted of children under the
age
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 of 15. A similar percentage (48%) comprised
individuals
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 aged 60 and over. Only 4% of the
population
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 fell into the 15-59
age
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 group. By 2055, the percentage of elderly
individuals
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 is projected to increase to 57%,
while
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 the child
population
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 is expected to decline to 37%. In
Spain
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, as in
Oman
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, the elderly
population
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 was larger in both years.
However
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, the percentage of elderly
individuals
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 in
Spain
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 is projected to decrease significantly, from 62% in 2005 to 46% in 2055. A corresponding increase is expected in the 15-59 year
age
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 group. The proportion of children aged 0-14 remained relatively stable between the two years. In both
Oman
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 and
Spain
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, the elderly
population
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 constitutes the majority in both 2005 and the projected 2055 figures.
Spain
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 has a smaller proportion of children than
Oman
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,
while
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Oman
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 has a very small proportion of its
population
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 in the working-
age
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 bracket (15-59).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, individuals, spain, oman, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • population
  • age groups
  • proportion
  • demographic changes
  • life expectancy
  • aging population
  • youth demographic
  • high birth rates
  • projections
  • demographic shift
  • stabilize
  • potential population decline
  • low birth rates
  • implications
  • significant change
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