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The given charts illustrate information about the location of dance classes and the number of students in different types of dance classes categorized by age group.

The given charts illustrate information about the location of dance classes and the number of students in different types of dance classes categorized by age group.
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The given charts illustrate information about the location of
dance
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classes
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 and the
number
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 of
students
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 in different types of
dance
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classes
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 categorized by age group.
Overall
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, private
studios
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 are the most common location for
dance
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classes
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,
while
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 college-based
studios
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 are the least popular. In terms of
dance
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 styles, modern
dance
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 has the highest
number
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 of
students
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,
whereas
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 ballet attracts the most younger
students
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. The pie chart shows that nearly half (48%) of all
dance
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classes
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 take place in private
studios
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. School halls account for 24% of the
classes
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, making them the second most common venue. Community halls and other locations represent 18%,
while
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 college-based
studios
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 make up the smallest proportion, at just 10%. The bar chart presents the
number
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 of
students
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 attending different types of
dance
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classes
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, divided into two age groups: under 11 and 11–16 years old. Ballet is more popular among younger
students
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, with the
number
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 of under-11 participants significantly higher than those aged 11–16.
Conversely
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, tap
dance
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 has a higher
number
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 of older
students
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 compared to younger ones. Modern
dance
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 is the most popular style
overall
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, with a particularly large
number
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 of
students
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 aged 11–16 attending these
classes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, number, students, studios with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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