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Some countries have legal ages at which people can drink. Other countries believe not having strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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Some nations enforce legal age restrictions on
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 others argue that a more lenient
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approach
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 without strict regulations is a better policy, in my opinion , I consider
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 governments ought to be more strict on the one hand , governments should be responsible and make strict laws .
Because children
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Children
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 must not drink
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 and I agree.
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drinking
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alcohol
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 ,establish rules in stores that
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 may not be sold to anyone under the age of 22 years old .
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, to prevent young people from drinking
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,
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 affects and causes health problems for children
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 the other hand ,some people think that a more lenient
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 without strict regulations is a better policy .Because everyone knows what is best for them .
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 they have the freedom to do whatever they want .
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 some families can protect their children from
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 abuse .Another reason is that
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some
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people
 feel that their government is not giving
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them freedom
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 with these laws when they want to drink
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to sum up
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 ,
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 people may vary in their opinions , I think that governments ought to be responsible and make strict laws to
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protect
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prevent children
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children

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas are logically structured and clearly connected. Each paragraph should focus on a single main point with clear transitions to help guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your introduction clearly outlines the topics you will discuss, and summarize them effectively in the conclusion. This helps in framing your argument.
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Expand on your main points with more detailed explanations and examples. This will strengthen your argument and make your writing more persuasive.
overall clarity
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and spelling for clearer communication and to avoid potential confusion.
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You provide a clear opinion on the topic, emphasizing the importance of strict laws to protect children.
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You present arguments for both sides of the issue, which shows a balanced approach and understanding of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal drinking age
  • Underage drinking
  • Health repercussions
  • Addiction
  • Drunk-driving
  • Responsible drinking
  • Forbidden fruit
  • Social rituals
  • Public health
  • Safety framework
  • Risks of alcohol
  • Cultural differences
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