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The scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.

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The bar graph illustrates the scores of three different in four various
seasons
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This
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 includes the data from 2002 to 2005 . The data is calibrated in
points
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 .
Overall
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, it is shown that
Team
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 B got the highest scores in four different
seasons
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.
However
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, the lowest record was of
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team
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 A in the first two years and
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team
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 C in the
last
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 year of the study .
To begin
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 with , in 2002
team
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 B got the highest
score
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 of 82
points
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 among the remaining teams .In 2003 their
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 decreased by 22
points
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 .After two years , their
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 almost declined by half to 43
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 .
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, it increased to 55
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 in 2005 .
Team
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 A,
on the other hand
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, started with its lowest
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 over the four
seasons
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 at five
points
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 . In the next season, it rose to 11
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 and in 2004 , it increased more than thrice its number in 2003 .
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 , in the
last
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 season, it drowns down to its lowest at 8
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 .
Finally
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,
team
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 C started with 10
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 in the first year and increased by 5
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 in 2003 . In the
last
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 two years of the
seasons
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 , it went down to 12
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 and eventually 5
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 in the
last
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seasons
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 which was equal to
team
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 A first
score
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 in 2002.

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task achievement
Consider elaborating on the reasons behind the trends observed in the data, which could enhance the depth of your analysis.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain a consistent tense throughout your essay. For example, when referring to past events, consistently use the past tense to ensure clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Try to diversify the vocabulary used in your analysis to make it more engaging and less repetitive.
task achievement
The introduction clearly states the topic and the period covered by the data, which sets the context well.
coherence and cohesion
The comparative nature of your analysis between the three teams is well demonstrated.

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