Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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many people
belive
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believe
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that
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government
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the government
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should to action of reduction
environment
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environmental
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pollution
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and housing
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problem
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problems
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to prevent illness and
desesaes
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diseases
disease
. I strongly agree with
this
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as both
the
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apply
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factor
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factors
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significantly impact
on
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apply
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public health.
firstly
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the environment
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environment
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environmental
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population is
leading
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the leading
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cause of various
heath
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health
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problems. Air
pollution
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from industries
znd vechiles
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and vehicles
release
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releases
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toxic gases,
cause
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causing
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respiratory illnesses like
asthama
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asthma
and lung infection.
water
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polution
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pollution
is
also
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of major thing
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that get
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get
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gets
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polluated
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polluted
pollinated
from
industries
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industries'
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waste
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chemical
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chemicals
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and
waste
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plastic casuse
serverl
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severe
diseases
include
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including
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cancer.
water
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and air are the one of the most
need
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needed
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for
human
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humans
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and wildlife.
Aditionally
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Additionally
, Soil
pollution
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from excess
of
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apply
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pesticide use and improper
dump
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disposal of
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waste
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on soil,
it
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apply
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may
effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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plant growing and and effect on food
due to
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toxic
chemical
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chemicals
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. the
government
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must
implementt
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implement
strict rules and regulations to control
industricalm
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industrial
wast
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waste
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,
promte
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promote
clean
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a clean
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envronment
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environment
,
enhance
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and enhance
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waste
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the waste
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recycling
sysytem
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system
. countries like India and
china
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China
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come
yp
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up
with a reducing
pollution
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and excess of
renewal
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renewable
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energy.
India
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Indian
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Government
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government
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, come up with
new
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the new
a new
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idea, ban plastic and
introducing
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introduce
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swatch barath.
moreover
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, housing problems
is
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are
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one of the
most
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biggest
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problem
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problems
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facing in
evry
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every
houses
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house
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. we can see many low-income families are living in overcrowded and unhygienic less
acess
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access
space.
this
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may cause of spreading
inflections
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infections
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such
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as cholera and typhoid. may
low income
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low-income
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families lack
acess
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access
of
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to
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clean
water
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ans
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and
sanitation and there are
lot
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a lot
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of home
sweage
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sewage
and Drainage
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problem
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problems
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and
lot
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a lot
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of
smell
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smells
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come
it
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from it
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. there is no clean household
surrounding
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by
munciplitys
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municipality
.
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The govenment
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govenment
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government
should build
afforable
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affordable
housing, improve sanitation
facilites
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facilities
and
provode acess
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provide access
to clean
water
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to ensure better living
condictions
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conditions
.
however
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,
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while
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apply
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reducing
poluation
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pollution
population
and improving housing can prevent
deseses
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diseases
disease
and illness. healthcare
servies
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services
should not be
ingored
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ignored
.
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government
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The govenment
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govenment
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government
must
also
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invest in
hospital
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hospitals
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,
vaccinated
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vaccination
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programs and public health awareness to
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control
ciontrol
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control
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spread
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the spresd
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spresd
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spread
of diseases In conclusion. I strongly
belive
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believe
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that reducing
environment
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environmental
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pollution
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and solving
housing
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the housing
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problem
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shpuld
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should
be
priority
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a priority
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for
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the govenmrnt
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govenmrnt
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government
governments
to prevent
illenesss
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illnesses
.

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task achievement
When presenting solutions, be specific about what actions you think should be taken and provide examples to support these ideas.
task achievement
You demonstrate a strong agreement with the idea that government should address pollution and housing issues, which is a clear stance.
coherence
Your essay has a logical progression, discussing pollution first and then housing, which helps guide the reader through your argument.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive healthcare
  • environmental regulations
  • respiratory diseases
  • public health policies
  • sanitation facilities
  • urban planning
  • communicable diseases
  • socio-economic factors
  • sustainable development
  • government intervention
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • industrial emissions
  • air quality index
  • affordable housing
  • mental wellbeing
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