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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph indicates the average money spending distribution of people's weekly
income
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to
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for
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 several tasks in one country in 1968 and 2018. In 1968,
whereas
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 people
were tend
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tended
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 to spend approximately 23% of their money
for
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on
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 free time activities, in 2018, food was the major consumption for
the
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apply
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society
by
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exactly 35% of their weekly
income
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. Fuel and power spending was the least money-demanding resource for the community in both years.
While
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 individuals
spend
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spent
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 only around 17% of their
income
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for
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 food in 2018, 50 years ago food expenditure was almost half of it by 35%, which was the biggest source of spending.
Also
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, clothing and footwear payments lowered, previously it was 10% of individuals'
income
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,
however
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, as time passed it mitigated to 5%. There
are
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 another similar task which fell off as well, which is personal good, in 1968 the average spending was approximately 8%,
thereafter
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 it halved to around 4%.
Furthermore
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, fuel and power expenditures
reduced
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as well as
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 others by around 2%. Housing spending almost doubled by 50 years apart, in 1968, it was 10%,
nonetheless
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, in 2018, it reached around 18%. On the one hand, transportation expenditures were increased to almost 14% of people's weekly
income
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. The most significant increase can be observable in leisure time spending since it almost tripled. Back in 1968, it was around 8%, followingly it peaked
to
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 around 23% of
income
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • proportion
  • weekly income
  • accounted for
  • total expenditure
  • housing and utility expenses
  • transportation costs
  • other expenses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • leisure activities
  • spending patterns
  • witnessed a considerable rise
  • experienced a substantial increase
  • allocating a larger proportion
  • reducing their expenditure
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