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The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the average month-on-month
price
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changes
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 of copper,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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 throughout the period of 2014.
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, the average
price
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changes
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 of
nickel
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 generally declined,
whereas
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nickel
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 and
zinc
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 remained similar with some fluctuations throughout the observed period.
Nickel
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 had
a
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 highest average
price
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changes
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 among observed metal commodities in January 2014. The average
price
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changes
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 of
nickel
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 and copper declined gradually from about 6% and approximately 2% in January to around -3% and nearly -1% in June, respectively.
Zinc
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 average
price
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changes
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 rose slightly from about 1% in January to around 3% in February before falling significantly to approximately -1% in June. All observed metals
price
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changes
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 bounced back in July to about -1% for
nickel
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, nearly 1% for
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cooper
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copper
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, and approximately -0.5% for
zinc
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.
Cooper
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,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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 average
price
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changes
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 declined slightly in October to approximately -2% for
nickel
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, nearly -0.5% for
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cooper
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copper
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, and close to -1% for
zinc
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 after experiencing a constant movement from July to September. These figures increased significantly
in
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 the end of the period to about 2% for
zinc
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, around 1.5% for
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cooper
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copper
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, and approximately 1% for
nickel
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, changes, nickel, zinc, cooper with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Price fluctuation
  • Average monthly change
  • Trend
  • Increase/decrease
  • Peak/trough
  • Stability
  • Volatility
  • Comparative analysis
  • Market factors
  • Economic events
  • Historical influence
  • Performance metrics
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