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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The maps indicate the current situation of Norbiton's industrial region and expected developments in the town. Recently,
although
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 Norbiton has many factories, in the future
besides
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 many other facilities, all of the industrial buildings will be replaced with residential buildings.
Furthermore
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, farmland will shrink in terms of size and
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
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The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun residences in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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big residences will
be appeared
Change to the active voice
appear
have appeared

It appears you have attempted to use the intransitive verb appeared in a passive voice construction. Consider writing the sentence in the active voice.

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.
At the end
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 of the road, which goes from the middle of the town to the east, there will be a school built.
Moreover
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, a playground will be built on the north side of the road. The medical centre will be located at the southwest of the playground.
In addition
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, all shops will be placed to the west of the medical centre. A big housing building will be built to the north of the river,
thus
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 for
the
Correct article usage
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It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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accessibility a bridge will be built over the river.
Additionally
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, the housing facilities will be expanded through the western regions of the town.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned development
  • transportation hub
  • residential housing
  • environmental quality
  • recreational space
  • pedestrian-focused design
  • vehicular access
  • modernization
  • commercial purposes
  • green spaces
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