Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities such as museums, theatres and art festivals. How important do you think these things are to society as a whole? Are there any areas which are more important for the government

Many citizens believe that the government funding of cultural establishments is unjust as they are costly and

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of benefit for the general public.

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their importance

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growth.

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, there are key areas that should be attended first. the following essay will elaborate on how they boost

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. Cultural institutions are important for both developing and developed countries as they foster local

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growth not only through entrance fees but

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visits with events, exhibitions and activities.

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, most of these amenities are considered iconic

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attractions, which is appealing for investors.

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, the British Museum is globally recognised, even though the entrance is free, its donations and investments

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been upscaling over the years.

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cultural amenities. As it has been mentioned these establishments are far from unimportant in society.

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, It is essential to prioritise government investment in critical sectors

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as these are fundamental and pivotal areas for the development of a country, since the welfare of the

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is paramount for the proper functioning of a nation, without a healthy population a society would collapse, leaving no individuals to appreciate theatres.

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community centres in suburban areas would ensure

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vulnerable citizens.

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is the foundation for social growth, as it

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future generations.

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technology in

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, children would be better equipped for future technological advancement.

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, manifold studies have shown that highly educated people are more capable of fully

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culture and art events. In conclusion,

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cultural amenities are necessary, they should not take precedence over essential services like

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and

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, which are

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human rights that must

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. In the future, the community ought to take part

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public funds distributions with clear explanations provided to avoid misunderstandings.