Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities such as museums, theatres and art festivals. How important do you think these things are to society as a whole? Are there any areas which are more important for the government

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Many citizens conjecture that the government should not allocate funds

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cultural establishments or events.

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these activities are important, they are not paramount as there are key areas to attend first. the following essay will elaborate on these arguments with some relevant examples. Cultural institutions are important to developing and especially for developed countries as they collaborate in the growth of the local economy, not only with

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incentivising visits with events, exhibitions and activities.

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, they can attract future investors.

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amenities are considered

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attractions,

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, the British

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is globally recognised,

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the entrance is free of charge, its donations and investments

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over the years.

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provides some justification

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cultural amenities. As it has been mentioned these establishments are far from unimportant in society.

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, It is essential to prioritise investment in critical sectors

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as health and education as these are the fundamental and pivotal areas for the development of any country, since the welfare of the citizen is paramount for an adequate function of a nation, without a healthy population a society would collapse and rapidly extinguish and there would not be individuals to appreciate theatres.

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, education is the base for social growth, as it

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future generations. In conclusion,

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cultural amenities are necessary, they should not take precedence over essential services like health and education,

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human rights

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grammar

Ensure consistent use of capitalization, especially at the beginning of sentences. For instance, 'although' should be 'Although'.

structure

Try to include a stronger thesis statement in your introduction to clarify your position more explicitly.

clarity

In the conclusion, clarify what you mean by 'humans right'. It would be clearer to refer to 'human rights' for better understanding.

content

The essay presents clear arguments about the importance of cultural amenities and the prioritization of essential services.

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Examples provided, such as the British Museum, enhance the argument for cultural institutions.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

254 words

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Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities such as museums, theatres and art festivals. How important do you think these things are to society as a whole? Are there any areas which are more important for the government

Your opinion

Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People believe that some individuals are born with leadership skills, while others think that leadership skills can be made. Discuss both views.

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