In the graph below, we have graph that shows in percentage changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.

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changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom from year 1996 to 2003.

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with, around 1996 to 1997 households had approximately 20% of access to mobile phones and it significantly peaked above 60% in the year 2003

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a

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necessity

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gadgets peaked sharply, CD players saw a minimal change in all these years. Internet emerged between 1998 and 1999

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it gradually surged by 2003 and it is widely used in every home.

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, gadgets and personal computers are linked

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internet

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a common thing in their day-to-day life. When

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computer

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computers

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came to market there was a usage of 30% in 1996 and

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it substantially climbed to 50% by 2003. In conclusion, Disks were mostly used till 2001 and

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slightly dropped by 2003,

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mobiles

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a dramatic increase by 2003 and

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internet access is common now in every cottage.

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, home computers

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seen

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moderate growth

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the years.