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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The graph illustrates the
number
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 of tourists participating
the
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in the
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 tour
to
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of
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the Carribbean
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Carribbean
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Caribbean
island
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 between the year
of
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apply
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2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, there was a stable increase
on
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in
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 the tourists visiting a
Carribbean
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Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
However
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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were
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was
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 higher than the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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. First and foremost, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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were
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was
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 0.25
million
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 in 2010, which was lower than the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 in 2010, there was a fluctuation
beween
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between
 2010 and 2012.
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 has
increase
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increased
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 steadily from 2012 to 2017, and even higher than the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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, which there had 2
million
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 people visiting
to
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apply
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Carribbean
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Caribbean
island
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.
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, there were 0.75
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 between 2010 and 2011,
indicated
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indicating
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 there were no changes.
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 there was a
slightly
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slight
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 increase from 0.75
million
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 to 1.5
million
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 from 2011 to 2013, there were no
further
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 changes between 2013 to 2015,
which
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when
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 there were only 1.5
million
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 visiting.
Also
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, there was a drop between 2015 to 2016, leading to
an
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apply
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unexpected results when compared to the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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