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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the starting
salaries
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 and the earnings after
three
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years
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 for five different professions in the UK,
while
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 the table provides data on the average weekly working
hours
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 for each occupation.
Overall
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, underground
drivers
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 earn the highest
salaries
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, both
initially
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 and after
three
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years
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,
while
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nurses
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 receive the lowest pay. In terms of working
hours
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, teachers and firefighters have the longest weekly schedules,
whereas
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 underground
drivers
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work
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 the fewest
hours
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. Regarding
salaries
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, underground
drivers
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 start with the highest income, just below £50,000, which increases slightly after
three
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years
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 to surpass £50,000. Firefighters
also
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 earn a relatively high salary, beginning at approximately £40,000 and rising to nearly £45,000. Teachers follow a similar trend, with an initial salary of around £30,000, increasing significantly after
three
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years
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. Police officers and
nurses
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 earn lower
salaries
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 in comparison, with police officers starting at around £20,000 and experiencing moderate growth,
while
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nurses
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 have the lowest earnings, remaining below £20,000 even after
three
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years
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. In terms of working
hours
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, teachers and firefighters
work
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 the longest, averaging 55
hours
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 per week. Police officers have a more balanced schedule of 40
hours
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,
whereas
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nurses
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work
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 slightly less at 38
hours
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 per week. Interestingly, underground
drivers
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, despite having the highest salary,
work
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 the shortest
hours
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 at just 36 per week.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, three, years, hours, drivers, nurses, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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