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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Many individuals show interest in discovering the history of the place where they live.
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 essay thinks that the primary reason for
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 curiosity is that
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 to detect if there were any criminal circumstances  and paranormal activities in the building or house and it can be researched by contacting local organizations.  Clearly, each building has
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 own history that can be amusing, amazing or even horrible. Residents may want to know the facts connected to the past of their home for various reasons,
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 as legal or supernatural and paranormal interests. Some
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 can find
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 to live in
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 house which has a cruel past or terrible secrets hidden in it, so they try to find out if
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 that type of situation took place.
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, results of the survey conducted by the members of the small local club called "Ghosts of the
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" in Pittsburgh demonstrate that approximately 78% of dwellers suggest
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 they would not live in any place that
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 ever had criminal or paranormal activity as they think that it is dangerous and can affect
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 in
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 way.
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, the need to investigate the real history of the building arises as a crucial detail. It can be done in different ways,
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, by getting information from the local archives,
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and databases
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 or by taking a look at  historical records. It is supposed to be an effective way to solve the problem as
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organizations own real information regarding that
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, not only in these situations, but in many others too,
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 prefers to stay in touch with agencies that can provide them real help. As follows, statistics of the local archive number 4A in Pittsburgh
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 they get over 100 calls per day from
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 need help to find some information regarding the past.
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, in the case of
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that
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 want to know about the past of the house in which they live, the provided essay thinks that the fear of criminal and supernatural activities makes
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to
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explore more and finds interaction with particular institutions the best way of research.

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The introduction could be more clearly structured, stating the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
More cohesive devices should be used to connect ideas and paragraphs more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors and clarity, such as "what" instead of "that" in 'people what to detect'.
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The essay provides relevant examples, such as the survey conducted in Pittsburgh, which enhances the arguments.
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The idea of community engagement in researching building histories is insightful and adds depth to the discussion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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