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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In some countries, a lot of
people
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 are interested in researching
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the
history
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house
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the house
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 or building they live in.
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reasons why
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interested
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 in it,
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 how
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information
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 about it. There are some reasons why
people
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 are getting interested in it and
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 reason is
safety
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 of their
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. Before buying a
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people
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always
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curios
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 about
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history
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the history
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 of
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house
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 can be possible that the
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 study from NASA in 2010 shows that 89% population of the world before buying a
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, start to get some
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is locate
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in
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 reason is that
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 have to know at least something about their
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 can have a great story
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that
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 the owners do not know and if somebody
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 about
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history
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about
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house
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 cannot answer and
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can be disappointing.
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, there is a study from QUA that was made in 1989 that showed that every building
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history
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 humans
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 not know.
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 always have some
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 with finding
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information
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history
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 of their buildings or houses but finding it is
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easier than
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 of the
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wont
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 there are a couple of sites
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 from whom
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 bought their
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sold
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person
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 a
house
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history
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its history
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about
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it
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or nobody will buy it.
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 a research in 2017 from OPL that showed that 76% of
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 in the world reject
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 a
house
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person
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 not know anything about the past of the
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. In conclusion, despite
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 about houses, there are some ways where
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 can easily find it

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task achievement
Improve the clarity and detail of your ideas. For instance, explain why safety is a concern beyond just the location of the house. This can enhance your argument.
coherence
Work on connecting your ideas more smoothly using linking words; this will help create a better flow in your writing.
coherence
Make sure to proofread your work. There are several grammatical errors and typos, such as "curios" (curious) and "that is can be possible" (this could be possible).
structure
You exhibit a clear structure in your essay with an introduction, main points, and a conclusion, which is a great foundation.
examples
Your examples provide relevant context, showing that you've thought about real-world implications of your points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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