IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

The
history
Use synonyms
 of the home or
contruction
Correct your spelling
construction
 of
people
Use synonyms
 is
being
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
interesting for them in some nations.
While
Linking Words
 there are some reasons for
this
Linking Words
 circumstance
such
Linking Words
 as what kinds of
people
Use synonyms
 have used their
houses
Use synonyms
, there are
also
Linking Words
 ways which individuals can use them to research it.
The first
Correct article usage
First
show examples
 and foremost, citizens can be interested in knowing which
people
Use synonyms
 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
history
Use synonyms
 lived in their
houses
Use synonyms
.
That is
Linking Words
 to say,
people
Use synonyms
 are
passionate
Change the adjective
passionately
show examples
 precising that what type of
ranks
Correct subject-verb agreement
rank
show examples
 humans who lived
the
Change preposition
in the
show examples
 recent
people
Use synonyms
's
houses
Use synonyms
 had in the past.
These kinds
Fix the agreement mistake
This kind
show examples
 of information can inspire or discourage society
to live
Change preposition
from living
show examples
its
Change preposition
in its
show examples
 house.
Additionally
Linking Words
, individuals can talk about the
history
Use synonyms
 of their
buildigs
Correct your spelling
buildings
 to their relatives or neighbours to mention to them the importance of
constructions
Fix the agreement mistake
construction
show examples
. For
examle
Correct your spelling
example
, a person is able to talk about his house to
people
Use synonyms
 that in the past the
last
Linking Words
 soldier of the Ottoman Empire lived in
this
Linking Words
 building and it can encourage an exotic view in
people
Use synonyms
's minds.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, humans are able to research
this
Linking Words
 process with different
people
Use synonyms
's help.
As a result
Linking Words
, old
people
Use synonyms
 who witnessed who lived in which
houses
Use synonyms
 can talk it to citizens who are interested in the
history
Use synonyms
 of their
accomodations
Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
.
For example
Linking Words
, an old member of society who is 92 is able to be asked about his friend who lived
someone's
Change preposition
in someone's
show examples
 house who asked the question. In conclusion, humans have a great interest
to understand
Change preposition
in understanding
show examples
 the
history
Use synonyms
 of their residents.
This
Linking Words
 interest may have several reasons,
also
Linking Words
 they can be determined by certain research processes.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into separate paragraphs with clear topic sentences. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, which will improve the overall clarity of your argument.
task achievement
Ensure that your examples are relevant and thoroughly explained. Some examples may need more context to clearly illustrate your points.
coherence and cohesion
Be mindful of grammar and vocabulary accuracy. Small inaccuracies can affect the clarity of your ideas, so it’s beneficial to proofread your work for grammatical errors and word choice.
task achievement
You have a clear interest in the topic and provide relevant ideas about why people are interested in the history of their homes and how they can research it.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion successfully summarizes the points made in your essay and reflects a understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
What to do next:
Look at other essays: