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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
participants
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 in five different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020. The activities include
film
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club
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, martial arts,
amateur
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dramatics
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,
table
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tennis
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, and musical performances.
Overall
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, the
film
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club
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 consistently had the highest number of
participants
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,
while
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amateur
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dramatics
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 saw a significant decline. Meanwhile,
table
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tennis
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 experienced the most substantial growth over the period. In 2000, the
film
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club
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 had around 65
participants
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, maintaining a steady level before gradually rising to nearly 70 in 2020. Martial arts had roughly 35
participants
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 in 2000, fluctuating slightly but remaining relatively stable throughout the years.
Table
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tennis
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, which started with approximately 10
participants
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 in 2000, saw steady growth, surpassing 20 by 2010 before surging to about 55 in 2020.
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,
amateur
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dramatics
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 had around 25
participants
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 in 2000, but
this
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 number declined sharply, reaching close to zero by 2020. Musical performances, which began with no
participants
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, saw a gradual increase from 2005, reaching around 20
participants
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 by 2020. In summary,
while
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 the
film
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club
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 maintained its dominant position
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table
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tennis
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 gained popularity,
amateur
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dramatics
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 lost almost all
participants
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, and musical performances saw moderate growth.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, film, club, amateur, dramatics, table, tennis with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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