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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps compare the differences between
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 in 2000 and
today
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.
Overall
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, it is obvious that
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 in 2000
had
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 not
too
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 many things to serve people.
By contrast
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,
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in
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today
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 has changed quite a lot and added more services. Look at the
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maps, Fishing boats and Marina (private yachts) have switched places together
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nowadays.
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 of the South way connecting the Car Park to the Road like before,
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today
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 changed to the West way linking between Car Park and Main road.
Besides
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, Showers & toilets have been added above the Car Park in the West of
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 by workers. In the Northern and above the map
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 have added one more dock. It can be seen that the
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today
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 has a specific change.
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 Cafés & shops next to Lifeboat and before did not have it. The second map has not only added more places but
also
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 changed the Public beach to a Private beach (for the hotel). Before,
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the southeast part of the Castle was disused but now it changed
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 a hotel.

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Improve the introduction by clearly stating what changes occurred between the two maps, instead of a general statement.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly, such as 'In contrast', 'Additionally', and 'Moreover'.
coherence and cohesion
Provide clearer comparisons in each paragraph by elaborating on how features have changed from one map to another, rather than simply listing changes.
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Use a more formal tone and avoid phrases like 'had not too many things', which can be rephrased for better clarity and precision.
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The task has been addressed with a comparison of the two maps and identification of changes.
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Some relevant features have been pointed out, demonstrating an understanding of the map changes.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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