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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a growing debate about whether
someone
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 should learn a foreign
language
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 if they are not going to travel or work abroad. Some people believe that those are the only reasons to learn a
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 others argue that there are many more. My personal view is that there are certainly more benefits
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 learning a foreign
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. On the one hand, some claim that there are only two reasons to learn a
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language
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, if
someone
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 wants to visit and if
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 wants to work in one specific country. For people with no
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 plans, it is not worth the trouble, since learning a foreign
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 from time to time. Unfortunately,
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, fortunately, the majority can imagine the extra merits of learning a
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. Among the most important of all,
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, is that you are able to make international friendships. Being able to speak only your local
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 cannot communicate with visitors in your country and making new foreign friends is nearly impossible. All in all, the debate about whether
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 should learn a
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language
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 if they do not have plans to visit another country has gained interest. There are two different views, some claim that there are
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 other advantages of learning a foreign
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 others disagree. Personally, I completely agree that there are much more benefits like speaking a foreign
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 could make international friendships easier.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines both sides of the argument before stating your opinion, so the reader knows what to expect.
task achievement
When discussing the advantages of learning a language, try to provide more specific examples or scenarios to support your points further.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, reiterate your key points more strongly and relate them back to the importance of learning a foreign language beyond travel and work; this will enhance the strength of your argument.
task achievement
You present a clear personal opinion that provides a solid framework for your essay.
coherence and cohesion
You successfully mention two distinct viewpoints, which enriches the discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing is generally clear and easy to follow, indicating a good level of understanding of the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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