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Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an ongoing interest in
the
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environmental protection. Many believe that the present-day
generation
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 should take
actions
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 to ensure that the environment is protected for the
future
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generation
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. I advocate
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 notion to a great extent, and I will delineate my reasons in
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, one significant reason why we must take steps to protect the environment for the next
generation
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 is the link between the health of
a
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 planet and the well-being of the people.
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, human activities,
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 as pollution, deforestation and
use
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the use
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 of non-renewable energy
source
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sources
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 lead to carbon
emission
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emissions
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. These
green house
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greenhouse
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 gases result in global warming and the rise in sea level, contributing to
the
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climate change and probable flooding. These may have detrimental effects on the
future
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 lives .
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, studies have shown that there
is
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a tremendous increase in
green house
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greenhouse
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 gas
emission
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emissions
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 over the years.
Reseachers
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Researchers
 stipulated that,
in
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five decades from now, humans may not thrive on
earth
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.
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 is clearly a global emergency and should be handled as
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.
In addition
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,
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 many will object that there are more pressing issues in our economy and healthcare sectors, I believe it is as crucial to protect the environment, as it is the ethical
responsiblity
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responsibility
 we have to the
future
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generation
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. To buttress
this
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, It is our duty to ensure that our descendants inherit a planet capable of sustaining life.
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 can be done by encouraging sustainable practices, which include the use of renewable green energy sources, recycling of waste, crop rotation and mixed farming. If we can obligatorily adopt these practices, we can effectively curb any
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 ecological catastrophe.
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ongoing exploratory research on alternatives to fossil fuel,
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 as solar, wind, hydro and biomass energy.
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 these are prohibitively expensive, we can ensure they are attainable. In conclusion, climate change has become a prevalent global issue, and I reiterate that the biggest onus is on
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generation
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 to collaboratively proffer solutions.
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 it remains our moral duty as the
future
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 ancestors, our
descendants
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descendant's
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 safety can
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 be guaranteed.

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clarity
Consider rephrasing 'the link between the health of a planet and the well-being of the people' to be more direct and clear, such as 'the relationship between environmental health and human well-being'.
grammar
Ensure all sentences are grammatically correct. For example, 'the future lives' should be 'the lives of future generations'.
evidence
Providing a few more specific statistics or recent data can strengthen your argument. For instance, citing a specific study could enhance the credibility of your claims about greenhouse gas emissions.
argument
You effectively communicate your overall agreement with the notion that the current generation should protect the environment for future generations, which is a clear stance.
structure
The structure of your essay is logical, leading the reader through your ideas in a coherent manner, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • moral responsibility
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • renewable resources
  • biodiversity
  • eco-friendly solutions
  • carbon footprint
  • green technologies
  • sustainability
  • natural resources
  • ecosystems
  • global warming
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
  • recycling and upcycling
  • non-renewable resources
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