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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given plans illustrate the ground floor of a
library
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 in 2001 and how it changed after reconstruction in 2009.
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, the
library
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's ground floor underwent major changes, including the replacement of some facilities with new items, and some areas were widened. In 2001, after entering the entrance, you can see a librarian's desk right in front of the entrance with the stairs nearby. In the bottom left-hand corner of the
library
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 was a
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 that contained self-help books. Next to it was the history
bookshelf
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 that was at right perpendicular to the fiction
bookshelf
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. The newspaper and periodicals section was to the east of the
library
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, paralleling the tables
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. In the
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 of the
library
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, the
table
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area
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 was separated into four small areas. After 8 years, it was seen some reconstruction. There were no changes to the librarian's desk and the stairs, but a small computer
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 was added. The newspaper and periodicals section was removed, making
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 for the films and DVDs section. In the middle of the ground floor, the
table
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area
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 was narrowed, there were only four remaining but they were longer. On the left-hand side of the
library
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, considerable genres of books were added
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 as Kitchen, economics, and Law. The fiction
bookshelf
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 was
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 moved to
this
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 location, making place for another extensive
table
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area
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. It witnessed a new
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area
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 in between two
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 areas

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly highlight the key differences between the two library layouts. Rather than just stating what changed, make comparisons that directly relate the features between the two years.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow of information by using more linking words or phrases to guide the reader through the points you are making. This can enhance coherence across your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Provide a brief conclusion summarizing the main differences or overall impact of the changes on the library's layout to strengthen the overall structure.
task achievement
You successfully described various sections of the library and mentioned important changes which shows a good understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction clearly outlines the purpose of the essay, providing an effective overview of what you will discuss.

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