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The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The table provides information about the salaries of secondary and high school
teachers
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 in 2009 in five
countries
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:
Australia
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,
Denmark
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,
Luxembourg
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,
Japan
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 and
Korea
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.
Overall
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, the significant difference in
teachers
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' salaries in
Luxembourg
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 compared to other
countries
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 was undoubtedly a prominent feature.
Moreover
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, there was
also
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 a substantial disparity in the number of
years
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 required to reach the maximum
salary
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 in
Luxembourg
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,
Japan
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, and
Korea
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 compared to
Australia
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 and
Denmark
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. To elaborate, the salaries of secondary and high school
teachers
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 started approximately at 80
thousand
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 in
Luxembourg
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,
while
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 in the rest of the
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countries
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countries,
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 the starting
salary
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 was noticed to be below 50
thousand
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.
In addition
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, the maximum
salary
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 was noticed to be over 130
thousand
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 in
Luxembourg
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,
while
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Japan
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 followed with the second largest maximum
salary
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 approximately 86
thousand
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. As far as the rest of the
countries
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 are concerned, the maximum
salary
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 was observed to be lower than 60
thousand
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.
Furthermore
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, to reach the maximum
salary
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 in
Australia
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 and
Denmark
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,
teachers
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 need 9 and 8
years
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 of work.
On the contrary
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, in
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Luxembourg
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Luxembourg,
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 a teacher would need 30
years
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, in
Korea
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 34 and in
Japan
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 37.
Therefore
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, in both
Australia
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 And
Denmark
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, someone would have reached the maximum
salary
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 of approximately 50
thousand
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 after 15
years
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 of practice,
while
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 in
Luxembourg
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 it would have reached approximately 120
thousand
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, in
Japan
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 65
thousand
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 and in
Korea
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 50
thousand
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, countries, australia, denmark, luxembourg, japan, korea, years, salary, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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